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February 15, 2005
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who is that girl
she seemed so unbreakable
she seemed so stong
always laughing
you thought she would never stop
thought she would never quit
untill she meet you
that unbreakable girl soon broke
that strong girl son crumbled
that laughing girl soon cried everyday
she just stopped one day
she finally quit
i wrote this 2/15/05 i was talking to jack...it was a kind of good chat but kind of not...i don't know...lol... it just involved alot of crazy stuff...um yeah i don't know if this poem would be for him but yeah anyways i guess i kind of like it...lol...

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Meadow1209 Feb 19, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
i like this. Its really good :) :+fav: again lol
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:icondeadinside28713:
aww thanks again glad u like it :glomp:
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Meadow1209 Feb 20, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
;-) correction... i like it ALOT. I still do. I like(d) it so much that i faved it. lol. your welcome :):):):):glomp:
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:iconhush-:
It intrigues the reader to know...what did she quit? Nice work!
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:icondeadinside28713:
thanks she quit life is what i was going for
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:iconitaichan:
awesome job! its a nice train of thought to write about...nicely written as well! fuck yea! :D
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:iconitaichan:
:D *nods* yuppers!
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:icondark-queen:
beautiful poem... I agree with all the comments here
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:icondeadinside28713:
aww thanks so much :hug:
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